PALAXIAS, PALAXIAS (4829-03-04) – In a public release today, the Office of the Shore Lords announced the formal transfer of all projects under REFLECTION DANCE from the Bureau of Innovation to the Bureau of Ships, confirming that the deployment of the Carp Scale Mirror to all IN starships has begun.
The Carp Scale Mirror represents a leap forward in ray shielding technology. Based on designs for a unipolar Meng mirror projection system developed at the Sur-Dodecíäd Blooms University of Sar Haixíä, the Carp Scale Mirror projects an array of interlocking “fish-scale” mirror fields around the starship. Whether in their semi-translucent resting state or raised to full, perfect reflectivity, the shifting scales create the look of a sleek fish swimming through space, hence the name.
Adding the boson-reflecting qualities of the Meng mirror, already extensively used in torch drives, to the existing kinetic barriers providing protection against massive particles will ensure that for the foreseeable future, the starships of the Imperial Navy will continue to be the best protected fortresses in the galaxy.
I think you’re missing a comma after “already extensively used in torch drives”—if not, there’s something else wrong with that sentence.
You are quite correct. Fixed.